So I’ve been reading The Art of the Poetic Line by James Logenbach. I appreciate Logenbach’s discussion of the line break vs. line end and do agree that when a line ends, it doesn’t necessarily break; the syntax may continue. Line break implies a definitive end, a stop. But, all lines of poetry do not function in a way that makes the term line break relevant. He provides a great example by William Carlos Williams, which follows:
To a Poor Old Woman
by William Carlos Williams
munching a plum on
the street a paper bag
of them in her hand
They taste good to her
They taste good
to her. They taste
good to her
You can see it by
the way she gives herself
to the one half
sucked out in her hand
Comforted
a solace of ripe plums
seeming to fill the air
They taste good to her
Though I may have made slightly different decisions for line endings in lines 1 and 8, the second stanza shows masterfully the impact and/or the potential of impact line endings can have upon a reader’s experience in the vein of comprehension and emphasis.
I liked the idea so much, I gave Williams’ technique a try. My humble attempt follows:
To a Bourgeois Sister
after William Carlos Williams
fingering a mound of
pearls flowing, water
strung about overlay tips
They look fine to her
They look fine
to her. They look
fine to her
You can tell by
the way she carefully rubs
her painted lips while
stroking a singular silk bead
Comforted
a solace of beaming planets
seeming to fill her eyes
They look fine to her
I’m still reading The Art of the Poetic Line. So far, so good. Check it out!
If you like the idea of revisiting popular poems, you may also want check out Conversation Pieces: Poems That Talk to Other Poems edited by Kurt Brown and Harold Schechter.
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